tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post2200516272650550544..comments2023-09-30T09:31:03.367-07:00Comments on As a Matter of Chance: Stranger on TrainRohanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03468620050434270232noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-91581202021409017262010-08-11T08:41:51.911-07:002010-08-11T08:41:51.911-07:00Thanx a lot for the criticism!!! Grt pleasure to k...Thanx a lot for the criticism!!! Grt pleasure to know you thought abt the story in depth!!Rohanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03468620050434270232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-42834681309622651862010-08-11T00:17:53.689-07:002010-08-11T00:17:53.689-07:00Hi Rohan :)
Loved the concept and this was a real...Hi Rohan :)<br /><br />Loved the concept and this was a really good thriller... Just have that nagging feeling that i would have written this differently :)<br /><br />For starters: You did send out the clue of "suicide" initially, that was a good indication to the reader about the gravity of the situation of the narrator. But you could have further strengthened on this point. <br /><br />Also, when both the characters are talkig to each other, there is a distinct unfamiliarity of stories. We later come to know that both the characters are the same but there is NO common ground in stories (Though it was fantastic, especially the gal's) except being Scorpio. You could have made the story more Mysterious if the gal character threw amazing insights into the life of the narrator. Even giving him guidance- and even giving him the crappeist and the craziest solution to all his problems- JUST JUMP.<br /><br />Now the suspense would be chilling- here you have gained your right to defy the reader's expectations- and NOT jump... <br /><br />Stories are always about ifs and buts... and doing the unexpected or doing the expected for unexpected reasons :) <br /><br />Yours is a good one... Hope to see you write more- and with more intensity and thought :)<br /><br />Write on, Bro!<br /><br />Cheers,<br />surysingh.wordpress.comAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-33641377141702727832010-04-27T02:51:28.906-07:002010-04-27T02:51:28.906-07:00Welcome to my blog Tan!!!
Thanx for your comment....Welcome to my blog Tan!!! <br />Thanx for your comment. . Helped me feel good. . <br />Keep reading. . :-)Rohanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03468620050434270232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-21601612107684412282010-04-26T23:20:53.869-07:002010-04-26T23:20:53.869-07:00Here for the first time...Your blog rocks!!! The s...Here for the first time...Your blog rocks!!! The suspense was well narrated.Tanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17219866978243155466noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-6457396899981447352010-04-12T09:21:20.733-07:002010-04-12T09:21:20.733-07:00Farila, wen u told only am realisin dat. . shuld h...Farila, wen u told only am realisin dat. . shuld hav given som indication b4 only dat d narrator s a guy. . Anyways Thanx 4 ur comments. . Keep readin. .Rohanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03468620050434270232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-78377708368705286052010-04-12T01:54:25.151-07:002010-04-12T01:54:25.151-07:00I thought both of the characters were girls but in...I thought both of the characters were girls but in the end you said His body.. Scary....I will never try to save anyone here after if they are trying to jump out of trainChapters From My Lifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07905577212056834284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-20816700441058963872010-04-11T09:58:45.384-07:002010-04-11T09:58:45.384-07:00Am nt sure. . ;-) its der in almost al of ma stori...Am nt sure. . ;-) its der in almost al of ma stories. .Rohanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03468620050434270232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-39561472344131475902010-04-11T09:15:04.823-07:002010-04-11T09:15:04.823-07:00creepy...
and who is this sarah character that see...creepy...<br />and who is this sarah character that seems to pop up in almost all your stories?Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02801981419523826580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-1206316171624395322010-04-11T05:57:51.598-07:002010-04-11T05:57:51.598-07:00Thanx lazy pineapple!!Thanx lazy pineapple!!Rohanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03468620050434270232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4157165924841395321.post-83778537436394893782010-04-11T03:07:44.557-07:002010-04-11T03:07:44.557-07:00oooh scary scary and fabulously written...
The end...oooh scary scary and fabulously written...<br />The ending was a shocker...Vinita Aptehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06549627033763568859noreply@blogger.com